守りの英会話 便利な表現集１

TOEFLの90点を目指して勉強中です。

今日覚えたのは下の言葉です。

便利に覚えていきます。

TOEFLスコアアップのコツは下でまとめているのでぜひ見てください

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守りの英語表現

・form your personality （人格を形成する）

・extremely (極端に)

　→程度の表現によく使えそう

実践問題と添削

問題

How do you think?

The goverment  should require all young adults to perform some kind of national service, such as millitary service or social work.

ブレスト

１．若い人の自由な時間を奪う

１）若い時期は一番楽しい人生で一番大切な時間

２）若い時期に学んだことが今後の人生の選択の幅を決める

２．ナショナリズムを高揚させる

１）戦争につながる

２）差別を生み出す

３．労働の正当な対価が軽視される

１）日本ではボランティアが強制されることがある（オリンピックなど）

実践

こう見るとスペルミスが多いなあ・・・。

（）内が指摘です。

I disagree with that the goverment should require all young adults to perform some kind of national service, such as military service or social work.I have two reasons for this.

Actually, some people say that social work gives the young good experiences which you can not noticed (→gain) by yourself. For example, when I was a junior high school student, we have(had) to do one day work in neigbor(local) companies. One of my friends went and work(ed) at (a) zoo at that time and after that, he decided to become an animal doc(t)or and he achieved his dree(a)m. Like this, I know sometimes social work give(s) us a great experience. However, this also has risks.

　→反論にしては意見が長すぎる。

First, if the goverment make young adults perform some kind of national service, it robs their free time and opportunity. I think it is one of the most improtant how you lead a life when you are young.(how you lead a life is the most important.) This is because, what you experienced and how you felt, when you are young, make (form) your personality. Moreover, you can choose your oc(c)upation from what you (have) learned（学び続けているので現在完了）. This is why if you want to become an expert of some area, you have to start to learn your major or to get some skills for that(文章が逆). It makes divercity to do what you want (唐突で意味不明).If you perform only what the goverment give, your idea is limited.

Second, in my opinion, such kind of national services like military services will enhance nationality(nationalism) to too high extent(→extremely). It has a good point to love your own country but this may lead (to) war. In addition, if you love only your country and you see other countries (inferior), discrimination will be happen (occur).

In conclusion, I do not think the goverment should require national service to young people. This is because it robs the most important time in your life and it will lead (foster nationalism) a war（war は結果であって、nationalismを論点としてきたはず）.

添削後

I disagree with that the goverment should require all young adults to perform some kind of national service, such as military service or social work.
I have two reasons for this.Actually, some people say that social work gives the young good experiences which you can not gain by yourself. However, this also has risks.

First, if the goverment makes young adults perform some kind of national service, it robs their free time and opportunity. I think how you lead a life when you are young is the most important . This is because, what you experienced and how you felt, when you are young, form your personality. Moreover, you can choose your occupation from what you have learned. This is why you have to start to learn your major or to get some skills if you want to become an expert of some area. If you perform only what the goverment give, your idea should be limited.

Second, in my opinion, such kind of national services like military services will enhance nationalism to too high extent. It has a good point to love your own country but if you love only your country and you see other countries inferior, discrimination will be occur.  In addition, discrimination may lead to war. As you know, when a war happened, they required revenew which only their own country could enjoy.

In conclusion, I do not think the goverment should require national service to young people. This is because it robs the most important time in your life and it will foster nationalism.